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Re: THE BED.
Outstanding piece of work. Wow. thats all i can really say. Wow. You gave the bed a life, a soul, a personality. In a sexual environment, you made the bed ...
Sep 3, 2008 -
Re: Messed Up Chapter 1
It does a good job of hooking the reader, however there are several points that read out awkwardly, mainly due to punctuation. "My house was large it was two stories ...
Sep 2, 2008 -
Re: Doll
This work is one of the more abstract ones I've read, and it did a great job on keeping my attention. A rather sinister and daunting story about how one ...
Sep 2, 2008 -
Re: Ringing Slumber
thank you for your input, aztoriwhitaker. I will begin working on implementing your suggestions immediately. You ask how I came up with this? I am the main character in this ...
Sep 1, 2008 -
Re: Ours
This is wonderfully written. I think you did a spectacular job of hiding what Kenny was while still portraying that he is loved by the character and is comforting to ...
Sep 1, 2008 -
Re: Ringing Slumber
Ring. Ring. Ring. Ring. "Hi you've reached my voice mail and I am unable to answer the phone right now so leave your name and a number and I will ...
Sep 1, 2008 -
Re: Welcome New Members!
My name is Raheel. Born in Pakistan, but raised and loyal to America. I am 20 years old, and I'm an avid writing fan.
Sep 1, 2008
